The Official Writing Challenge
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Good beginning, with descriptions and sense of danger.

As a reader, the last paragraph could have been show, not tell. Perhaps she walks out, as the sun rises, falls to her knees, thanking God on the only clump of grass for miles. The old saying: "Show, don't tell."

I thought the beginning was well done, so the potential is there. Keep writing!
Very well done! I've never understood people who stay in their homes despite the danger.

I agree with the previous commenter's critique, and would add that this good sotry deserves a better title.

I enjoyed reading this very much.
Good story.
I like Martha.... don't understand her though! LOL I'm with Jan, I'd be outta there.