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11/06/09
I feel I have heard this voice before-if not with my physical ears-at least with my reader's ear. Or have we played together? I have never even seen snow let alone romped there. Your writing reaches within and calls out playfulness even at my age. I love the MC's crawl uphill-been up many a hill myself! Wonderful scriptures.
11/09/09
Oh, brrrrrr! I'm NOT ready for snow!

Your story is charming and well-written. If you type in MSWord, you can avoid the formatting difficulties by typing single-spaced and block style (no indenting), like this comment. Just hit "enter" an extra time to create the blank spaces between paragraphs.

You might also use the "preview" button before you hit "submt", to make sure that your story looks the way you want it to look.

I enjoyed this wintry tale--particularly the ending.
Sounds like the beginnings of a great love story!
11/10/09
I love how the scripture flows out of this girly 40 something year old character. You captured a way to remind us that the Lord helps by giving us strength we didn't know we had, and then rescues in very unexpected ways.
oooh, we don't get storms like that in Texas! :-) Enjoyed the snowy tale with a good underlying message.

I would suggest spending a little more time on editing. I usually write my piece, and then leave it alone for a day or two (time allowing). I typically edit it at least three or four times after that before submitting.

Good job weaving this story together!
11/11/09
I had to laugh at "my snow jig".. . I could almost see this! :) There's nothing more beautiful than a "Sugar Plum Fairy World". Loved your rescue at the end! :)
11/12/09
Thanks for inviting us in to your Sugar Plum Fairy World!
11/12/09
Love her childish antics and her desire to fully live again! And that little romance hint at the end? Perfect.

Other than format troubles, your story captured me!