The Official Writing Challenge
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This is cute, but I was unclear what type of prose this was. I'm guessing a free-verse poem but was not certain.
02/12/10
I agree, this was a real cute idea to meet the challenge. I'm not sure of the style, either, but that's not surprising. I am stuck in a rut!
It was an unique way to write. I enjoyed how you covered all the different ways to translate ohh. Keep writing.
02/16/10
I enjoyed this very much--there was something on each of the three levels that I could relate to. No bugs! A very fun entry.
This was a fun entry--even the "unknown" styling added to the fun. Very creative take on the topic, and I'm glad you did it.
02/18/10
I like how the words and sentences grow longer with each line. Creative way to write it! It kind of makes anticipation for what's next grow with the words. :) Interesting style!
02/18/10
Creative and fun!
Love this Holly! Really great! Can identify with many of those!
02/19/10
Hey AnneRene'. It's nice to meet you. Thanks for the critique and going through such a long chapter. I agree with you that I have too much information about starting a band than I need, and I'm trying to decide how to summarize and simplify. I'd like to know why you felt like the chapter is flat and how I could unflatten it. :)

Ha! What a riot. I thoroughly enjoyed this short work of quirky thoughts and feelings. The first part with the stair-like lines was pretty cool. I think all of us can find things to relate to in this. Sometimes it's nice to find something short and fun to read. Thanks and God bless!
02/19/10
Oh yeah, and I completely know how it feels when someone doesn't think a joke you tell is funny. I can hear something I find hilarious and when I repeat it to someone else they just roll their eyes or don't get it. Oh well. We can't all appreciate British humor or random nonsense.
02/27/10
I really enjoyed this funny and creative entry.