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08/09/14
This is a beautiful message crafted so well. I loved the descriptions of nature you painted in my mind. Well Done.
A nice little "could be" story with a good message.

When you read your story again you will probably notice at least one spelling error.

You used some well thought out descriptive area in your story.

The more you think of descriptive areas the easier they will be to write.
This was an excellent story. You shouldn't be in Level 1 too long. Congratulations~
08/09/14
Love angel stories!
Well done, well said, and beautifully written.

God bless~
08/10/14
Good job.

Your sentences drew me into the calming and beautiful scenery.

I agree with Larry, you used some good descriptive sentences. Signs of some great writing ahead.

One suggestion would be to enhance your opening. Make it pop. Maybe you could have focused on the stranger that would appear, as he was central to your story. Just a suggestion.

Keep writing

God bless

great job Julene! If this does not win, I will be in shock! A fantastic article that deserves strong consideration. Keep up the great work!
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