The Official Writing Challenge
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08/28/14
A good depiction of a moment in time and lesson learned. Your first four sentences all begin with passive verbs. "was" Try to find stronger ones. Good job, keep writing!
08/29/14
I'm so glad Ruby was okay!
This made me smile...and God bless you for caring for her and manuervering your way inside to make sure she was alright.

You painted the picture well as this tale unfolded before my eyes.

God bless~
This is a well written life story- getting locked out.

This happens in larger cities more than in smaller towns. Some areas just don't have to keep their doors locked.

I liked how you shared your embarrassing moment as well as your care as a care giver.
09/04/14
You definitely have a knack for story telling. Thank you for sharing this piece. I could sense the concern for Ruby and her safety. Keep on writing!