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I liked this story, it had a lot going on in such a short space. I felt like I was living the day with this family.

I got a little confused when you changed from full names to nick-names without any warning. At the second to the last paragraph, you wrote food "addition" instead of "addiction". Easy typo, but it was the highlight of the story.

I like how you brought me into this family and I could picture their physical attributes and I loved the visual of the old farm house.

High-quality, absorbing descriptions and fun flow through this work. I also like how your close maintains the denial of any problem
A great approach to the topic at hand! I really enjoyed this from beginning to end. Well done.

God bless~
This was very believable. I grew up knowing it was a sin to waste food, eating more than you need, not so much.
Nicely written. Very descriptive. Interesting twist at the end.

Interesting that we feel free to talk about others "sins" and not our own. That is a shame to us.
an interesting take on a timely issue and that is over-eating and weight control. You showed that this is an issue for a lot of people and not just us (me).

good job.