The Official Writing Challenge
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01/29/15
Excellent thoughts and wisdom in this piece. Well said and done.

God bless~
You have two or three "main" areas in this writing.

I feel it would have been a stronger paper if each one of them could be dealt with separately. Each area is good buy by combining them together some of the power and urgency is lost (and each needs its own power and urgency).

You have included some good thought we all need reminded of at time.

Keep thinking.
02/01/15
Thanks for the feedback Larry. I agree there are two main ideas that could have been developed separately even though they were both forms of greed. It probably got a little muddy trying it the way I did.