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I really liked the beginning. You showed the ambivalence of the MC in a brilliant way that compelled me to want to read on, to understand this demon. It was a great hook, and I think you did a wonderful job of corralling the reader and pulling her into your MC's world.

I did note some minor punctuation errors. Also, there is a way to make the footnote numbers smaller (though I don't know, I'm sure I could help you find out.) In this sentence, you're missing the comma to the introductory phrase and you switch to the universal you. I'd urge you to keep it in the first person like you did earlier. For example: In the police academy, I learned that any time a suspect attacks me and forces me onto my back, I'm in serious trouble. (I switched the ending to avoid the cliche`.)
By keeping the POV consistent, it makes the reader feel like she is right there with you.

Personally, I felt it lost some of it's umph when you got down to the verses. It felt more like a mini sermon than the tug-of-war between good and evil that you used earlier. I love that paragraph that starts with I cringe. It still shows the internal battle. If you had just sprinkled the verses a bit with that continued ambivalence, for me, it would have a much more powerful effect. For example maybe something like this: I open my Bible and read King Solomon's words.
"A personís wisdom yields patience Ö"
The demon scratches at my insides, and I hurl my Bible across the room. After a bit, I cage my demon and pick up my Bible with tears coursing down my face. Once more I read God's words.
I know I took some liberties with your MC, but I wanted to demonstrate a way that you could keep that spectacular battle going.

Your work will touch everyone who reads it and I know they all will be able to relate to it in one way or another. I can see God's work through your words and it is amazing. You really nailed the topic and did so in a real way that carries such a powerful message. You took me on a journey which isn't easy to do with the limited word count. Kudos on a great job.

On the message boards, there is a thread called Jan's Writing Basics. I urge all levels of writers to read and participate in it. Jan is wonderful about leaving feedback for anyone who posts in the thread. It's one of the best learning tools the internet has to offer. If you haven't checked it out yet, here's the link:
This contains a good discussion on the power of the tongue and how the tongue must be controlled.

Controlling ourselves always makes us the "bigger man".

Nicely written.
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