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08/15/15
Interesting take on the story of Jonah.

Red Ink: Use a period at the end of a complete sentence.
08/16/15
Well written. I'm glad you included the last chapter. Most people forget about it, but that's the theme of the whole book. I'm not sure if this meets the topic of "Tourist Attraction," but standing alone, it's well done.
08/19/15
your taking should be you're; left out "got" before caught; dark and dank should be separated by a comma. All of that said, it was a cute way of presenting the story of Jonah.