The Official Writing Challenge
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Clever and well-written. Unfortunately, there are too many Bubbas in the world.
This is brilliant. Your word choices are nothing short of genius. I love the mental pictures you painted. Scorched, spewing, and constricted are great choices and way more specific than burned, spraying, and tightened. My only possible red ink is that it's not necessarily a tourist trap. The fact that they are real towns helps, but I doubt it will matter much because you nailed the other criteria the judges use. You're beginning pulled me in immediately. You had a clear and powerful message. The paragraphs flowed nicely, and the ending was divine, well maybe not divine... But certainly realistic. ;) You did an outstanding job.
Wow that was awesome! I was taken right into this story, and am glad not to be spending eternity here.
Brilliant and way beyond entertaining. A delight to read such a creative piece of writing!

God bless~
Great use of imagery, I was totally caught up in your story, great job.
Congratulations on your third place award in beginners, Loni.
Congratulations. On placing third. I enjoyed reading your article.