The Official Writing Challenge
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10/15/15
A very touching story. It sounds like this came from a personal experience. Nice work!
10/15/15
That was a neat story. So happy for the good outcome. Your should have been you're in "of you're lucky". I think it needed a few more commas but all in all well-done.
10/17/15
This is a very touching story. I am an identical girl twin as well.

I sometimes found it difficult to tell whether the grandfather or the husband were talking. Also "your" should be "you're" before the word lucky.
I can't see this happening today in a big city hospital.

More realism with the hospital setting is required to make it more plausible.