The Official Writing Challenge
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The message is good.
It was a little difficult to read because it was all one paragraph. Next time, give it more white space.
It was a good devotional piece which would benefit from paragraphing and white space for easier reading.
Great message. One day we will all be unveiled for our works, good and bad.

I agree with the other comments about breaking it into smaller paragraphs and adding more white space. I also think you could add more of your own observations to this devotional.