The Official Writing Challenge
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01/26/17
<I>"Blessed are the meek for they shall inherit the earth..."</I>

And so it is, and so you've told in such a touching way. Wonderful job with this topic, and you are so obviously blessed as evidenced by your words,

God bless~
This is a nice piece. Your message is clear, yet it doesn't feel preachy at all. My only red ink is the saying is beck and call (http://www.quickanddirtytips.com/education/grammar/beckon-call-or-beck-and-call). You did a nice job of painting a picture and left me with a smile on my face.
This is a good example of a story in verse form. - a kind of poetry.

Using the phrase "I pine for", I could not determine whether the MC was content with her surroundings or still had a desire to have what the other had.
01/28/17
Others have left great comments & critiques, so I'll just say- keep writing. I enjoyed reading your article & thought it had a good message.
02/03/17
Thanks for this. Good comments have been made, so I'll just say Congratulations on your second place win!

Keep writing, and God bless - Trudy