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02/22/14
Very well done...you took a difficult subject and brought it to life without depicting the "violence" --The MC was clearly at the end of her rope, and she struggled with so many things that were swirling about in her mind.

Excellent story telling. The tone was authentic and the outcome hopeful.

Nicely done.

God bless~
02/23/14
You have deftly and compassionately described the feelings of shame and despair involved with divorce. It would be interesting to find out how this dilemma is resolved. Keep writing.
02/26/14
You did a great job of showing the conflict and confusion that occurs in an abused person's mind.
It probably would have more drama with more showing than telling. For example, for 'she felt embarrassed', how did that look? Did she blush? Look down at her nails? etc.
All in all, a captivating read on a very topical subject. Thank you.