The Official Writing Challenge
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This story has a great opening that grabbed my attention right away. A poignant and descriptive story.
Wow, this pulled me in at the beginning. You had good descriptions that helped me visualize the story.

You did great with this story. The suspense was perfect. The pacing just right and the details good without being inappropriate. This is one of your bests! Congratulations on ranking 2nd in your level and 14 overall. Happy Dance!
Trudy, this is wonderful! Kept me on my toes until the end. Perfectly created and passionately shared. Congratulations!!