The Official Writing Challenge
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I think it is difficult to critique a poem. AMEN to all of this!
Good job tracing the unexpected elements of Jesus' life from birth to the end. :)
Beautifully expressed.
Nicely done
I believe that it's the greatest surprise ever!
Some of your rhyming lines jump around.

You can have a greater choice of words for rhyming if you can change the order of a sentence. Let the verb come last in a line or an adjective come last. You can say the same thing with words in unusual positions and this is a common practice with those who choose poetry a their choice of expression.

Keep writing. When God puts "the urge" to write, we should not quit - just learn how to express ourselves better.