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I enjoyed your characters and the dialog. You did a nice job of bringing the scene to life. I did notice a slight POV shift in the beginning. Because this is written in the first person, you can't say what Sarah noticed because that would be going into her head. Perhaps she nodded because her hair was in her eyes. It's a silly example, but I hope it shows you what I mean by a POV shift.
I really enjoyed your message. Even today, we tend to bargain with God. He loves us and allows it, but it is something to think about. Nice job.
12/12/14
A great job along with a powerful message. Thank you for sharing this well written entry.

God bless~