Notice: Undefined index: KT_UserID in /var/www/vhosts/faithwriters.com/subdomains/transition/httpdocs/wc-article-level4-previous.php on line 32
The FaithWriters Writing Challenge and contest for Christian Writers!
The Official Writing Challenge
This article has been read 866 times

Notice: Undefined variable: comments in /var/www/vhosts/faithwriters.com/subdomains/transition/httpdocs/wc-article-level4-previous.php on line 213
Member Comments
Member
Date
07/17/09
A fun read.
I kept trying to find a meter and not managing it, which was a bit frustrating.
You really did get the child's voice and priorites perfect!
07/17/09
The short last line in each stanza seemed to jar the meter a bit--but I did like the fun way you presented the mother from her child's POV.
07/19/09
You truly are a dictionary of rhyming words - well chosen.

I felt as if I were looking through a shoebox full of summer vacation photos.
07/19/09
This put a smile on my face! Very cleverly written! At first, I had a little trouble with the fourth line in each verse, but the more I read, the more I liked what you had done with the poem.
I had a little trouble with the meter, too (and not just the shorter lines), but loved the message. It's so true! haha