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03/05/17
I like this.

As much as I like them, I almost feel like you don't really need the last two paragraphs, or that they should be a bit more subtle. It shifted tone a bit from "nice story" to more of a devotional tone, and I'm not sure that was necessary. Maybe just ended it with something along the lines of "It reminded me how our Creator takes our broken pieces and turns it into something beautiful."

I really do like this though, and I do like the spiritual tie in at the end.
03/08/17
Beautiful descriptions and analogy! I could really "see" the lamp with all of its dancing colors.
03/08/17
A beautiful story!
Congratulations on ranking 18 overall. Happy Dance!