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This is a sweet story, but I was waiting for the shoe to fall. I was sure there was death involved, but I was wrong. It would have made this very poignant, but it was a nice story on its own.
I think there's a short story in here - you certainly could expand this to a few thousand words. Then the scene with the sweet peas could be present tense and more satisfying to the reader. You had me anticipating that amazing moment and it was a bit of a let down in the 'dream forward' way. Still compelling characters and such a great story. I hope you expand it for all the fullness it deserves.
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Such romance. You make me long to 'do over' some of those scenes in my own marriage, but like they say, "You can't put an old head on young shoulders". Very touching.
This is such a sweet story. I loved how they both sowed secret seeds of love for another. This is a feel good story. Good job.