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The FaithWriters Writing Challenge and contest for Christian Writers!
The Official Writing Challenge
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I love it! Just the right balance of suspense and humor.
This is fantastic. I found myself chuckling and shivering. AI scares me a wee bit because of stories just like this one...and Terminator. ;) The pacing is perfect. You did a great job of building suspense. The one thing I noticed was the use of the word alright, which technically isn't an approved spelling in edited works; all right? I also noticed you used a lot of exclamation points, which can sometimes be distracting. You did save them for dialog though, which is a huge plus! Other than that though, I think your take on the topic was fresh and interesting. The characters were well-developed too, and the ending was a great one.
A very novel take on the topic. I enjoyed the humour.
I loved this! Kind of a cross between Star Trek and the old Lost in Space. Well done!
So creative and fun. Great job!
Congratulations on ranking 13th overall. Happy Dance!